elionwyr: (madam spooky)
elionwyr ([personal profile] elionwyr) wrote2011-10-26 12:23 pm

twiddle - "A Dutiful Child"

There is a house on a hill full of secrets and screams.

No one goes up there any more.

And in a window of that house never visited by light, a little girl watches the world she can't touch.

Once upon a time, she did. But then she was told to stay, and wait, with her books and her toys. Being a dutiful child, she did exactly that.

She wanders down the hallways, missing electric illumination. "Hello, Daddy," she says softly at the bottom of the stairs. He doesn't reply. He never does, any more.

No power means no chance of doing wrong by cooking. The kitchen surrenders peanut butter and bread. It's become a boring meal. She doesn't complain. Good girls don't.

A trip to the library for a book from the shelf that's hers, hers alone, gifts her with a book by Poe. The story about the monkey - that one always makes her laugh.

Book in one hand, food in another, she carefully steps around her father and returns to her room to read by sunlight until words vanish into the dark. Then she'll watch the street, like always, skin pressed against the glass, hoping for Tomorrow to bring someone to her door.

[identity profile] ayalanya.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 04:29 pm (UTC)(link)
God. This one disturbs me far more than any other that you've written.

(These twiddles are magnificent, by the way - I love your writing.)
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[identity profile] elionwyr.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 04:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh gads..I was full of doubt about this one.

And..thank you, so much, for saying something. I generally think I'm writing my twiddles and throwing them into a vacuum. I really appreciate your words and high praise. *hug*

[identity profile] ayalanya.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 04:35 pm (UTC)(link)
I think this one disturbs me in part because I can easily picture myself in her place (and such a horrible place), and in part because I can easily imagine someone doing that to MY daughter. Oh my god.

Ooh, I should comment more then - I loved loved loved the one before the last one, with the dismemberment-as-worship.
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[identity profile] elionwyr.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 04:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Yeek! *bigger hug*

And..you did re: worship? Oh, that's lovely to hear. She's been poking around in my head for quite a while now..I'm not really sure what she's up to.

[identity profile] softlywhispered.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 04:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Deliciously dark
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[identity profile] elionwyr.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 04:45 pm (UTC)(link)
:) !
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[identity profile] adelheid-p.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 06:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Haunting.
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[identity profile] elionwyr.livejournal.com 2011-10-26 06:37 pm (UTC)(link)
*beam*

Beautiful

[identity profile] janusaries.livejournal.com 2011-10-27 03:49 am (UTC)(link)
I love this. But I love everything you write.
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Re: Beautiful

[identity profile] elionwyr.livejournal.com 2011-10-27 11:48 am (UTC)(link)
Very high praise. Thank you. *hug*